Problems...
1. He presents words like "if you really want to know" and "if I have to" that explains his boring life as the average teenager. Amanda
2. In Chapter One of The Mezzanine, Nicholson Baker's elegant and flowing elevation, journalistic and descriptive denotation, and slightly sweet musical tone convey the vivid detailing of the narrator's office. Although there is not an emotional tone to the passage, it still presents a brilliant and exact description of the building and its surroundings. His scholarly word choice is depicted through "radians of black luster that ride the undulating outer edge" and the lobby's "towering volumes of marble and glass." His denotation is evident through the descriptions of "the struts and piers" and the "black Penguin paperback and small white CVS bag" which are clearly easy to picture. The mood isn't very uplifting, but the connected words of "sunlight," "glossy," and "shine" help to emphasize the melodious sound that Baker employs. XC Hoosier 3366
The problem I have with the above quote is that although the writer uses strong verbs, they also use a halping verb before hand.
3.In Nicholson Baker's work The Mezzanine, he uses elegant and intricate diction to create a formal tone. Skittles Train
4.The breezy feeling of ease when he notices the "Long glossy highlights" in the the cracks that hang among escalators. The Chief
This one is more grammatical but it it is a run on.
However the best one that I read is from my dear friend Cara, who I have not talked to in a long time! :( Anyway, here's the link... Less Than Three
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